FIRST VERSE!

yaaaay so last night at like, 2:00 AM I somehow managed to write a decent first verse for my new song, which I came up with a chorus to. plz comment on what you think!


I try so hard
not to hear
but yet I listen
when you say things that get my false
hopes high
And I do my best
not look
then accidently see you
love her and make
me cry

And I hope that
some
day
you'll realize
while I'm smilin' by day
you're killin me on
the inside
when we laugh as friends
but you through my
disguise.

Now at night I have to
lie in my bed
and hum my favorite song
and staaaare at the ceiling
While I play with my hair
and then I'm thinkin of you
and I'm tryin
to ignooore
*slow*
that when I hug my sheets. . .
water runs down my cheeks
and I fall asleep
with teardrops on my pillow

please comment!!!

good chorus?

hey people, omg sorry I haven't been on in so long! I feel bad. I Came up with this chorus, but I have no idea what to do for verses. oh well, hope you like it.

Now at night I
lie in my bed
and I hum my favorite song
and staaaare at the ceiling
While I play with my hair
and then I think of that guy
and I'm tryin
to ignooore
*slow*
that when I hug my sheets. . .
water runs down my cheeks
and I fall asleep
with teardrops on my pillow

urg. need verses. stumped.

Jordan

Joooordan
Joooooordan
Joooordan

guitar

Last time I
saw
you
you were
sittin on a bench
I laughed
cuz I looked like a mess and then you
smiled at me like you doo
Your
freak-y
girlfriend was
nowhere to be found
So I came over and I sat down next to youu

Joordan <------CHORUS
Jooordan
Why'd ya hafta
come along and
make me feel like I doo
Joordan
Jooordan
what is it about you
that makes me
do the crazy things that I doo

We start-ed
talkin and I
looked in to
your eyes
they were a
dreamy dark brown
that almost
perfectly match mine
you hat
turned backwards
coverin you dark red hair
and I couldn't stand to think
that another girl's hands had been there

CHORUS

Next day I saw you on the beach, I
said "Hi"
you looked down at the sand
then your girlfriend came up beside you
she was
holdin your hand
holdin you hand
(softly) holdin your hand

What is it about you
that drives me crazy?
could it be your
hair
your eyes
your smile
or just
your voice
What is it about you
that drives me crazy?
could it be your
hair
your eyes
your smile
or just
your voice

Why can't you see that she
aint the one
why are you blind to what's right
in front of you
I guess that's just one of your flaws
that makes me
want you

Joordan
Jooordan
Why'd she hafta come along
and steal your heart from you?
Joordan
Joordan
When will you realize
that I'm the one who's sposed to be with you

I learned that
you girlfriend moved
away, you were
pretendin to be sad
that next year at school was
the best we ever had
I'm still waitin
for the day to come
when you'll walk up to me
and you'll look into
my dark brown eyes
and seee

(softly)
Joordan
Jooordan
(strongly)
Joordan
Joordan
(slowly fading in volume until almost a whisper)
Joordan
Jooordan
Joordan
I love you

New Song!!!

okay, so I just wrote a new song (yaaaay!) It's about as long as Call You Mine, so it won't be up for awhile. Hope you like it!

Maui

Well, I've been in Maui for a couple days now, and have been cut off from the internet until now. I got bored so i wrote this little poem in about 2 minutes while i was in a pool.

The palm trees
swaying in the breeze
I look to my left
I see the wide open seas
the scent of plumerias
drifting in the breeze
and I know there's only one place
I can be
the sun beating on my back
my feet make a little splash
in the warm waters of Maui

oh dear.

well, turns out that the guy I've had a crush on for the past year, and the one that I finally racked up the courage to ask him out on friday, has a girlfriend. guess I'm keeping quiet on friday. New song on the way.

Sad and happy

I wrote this in a card for my Mom, she's moving to Idaho so she can be ready when I go to highschool there. Can't wait to see you this summer!

Now I'm sure I'll miss you
but remember, I'll always be with you.

I can't wait to join you,
and leave the sun for snow
but there's no rush,
take your time,
you're on speed dial, you know!

I love you to the moon and back,
and maybe pluto too,
remember
a hundred hearts would be too few
to carry all my love for you.

Can't wait to se you, mom! <3

New poem

okay, so I wrote this Thursday night (the 13th). I literally sat up in my bed, at 10:30 PM, grabbed a piece of paper, and scrawled (in my half-asleep handwriting) out this poem, then went back to bed. No, I was not depressed.

THE HURT

I'm in here alone
lying in my bed
there's no one to hold me
it's dark. I'm dead.
My misery unnoticed
nobody cares
I didn't have the strength
to scale life's stairs.

I'm sure there is light
if i were willing to find it
but my unsaveable soul
might be blinded by it.
All I can wait for
is for day to begin
but my torture never ceases
all I can pray for
is the end.

Ladybugs (based on a true experience)

One day i took a hike with my mom, and to my surprise, there were ladybugs EVERYWHERE. And I mean everywhere, every thing in sight was coated with a layer of red. This amazing experience inspired me to write this song.

LADYBUGS

ladybugs
ladybugs
everywhere
ladybugs
ladybugs
in the air

well today I took a hike
up my favorite trail
the sun beating on my baaack
I jog a little faster to a clear rolling creak
and what I see makes me do a double taake

ladybugs
ladybugs
everywhere
ladybugs
ladybugs
in the air

on the ground
on a branch
in the trees
little dots
of black and red
bringing good luck
to me

well I heard that in the US
they're omens of good luck
and then
one lands on my finger
I count the black spots on it's back
dot by dot
and to my luck I think it just might linger

I'm very careful to watch my step
because there's hundreds,
no, thousands,
no, millions on the ground
It's like the sun
decided to rain bright red
and the blood drops are all flying arouuund

Well just like they're little wings
the time just flies
and already
the sun has gone down
I say goodbye
to as many as I can count
but when I leave
they all
seem to
frooown

To this very day I never forget
when i took that fateful hike
and there where

ladybugs
ladybugs
everywhere
ladybugs
ladybugs
in the air

on the ground
on a branch
in the trees
little dots
of black and red
bringing good luck
too me

tell me what you think =)

A poem (and song)

okay, so I originally wrote this as a poem, but later gave it a melody turned it into a short song. It has been published in some book, you know, one of those "celebrate children's poetry" kinda thing. They thought this was good, so they put it in. I wrote this when I was 11

BROKEN MEMORY LANE

well today I took a stroll
in the back of my mind
just to see what was still there
but when I reached the chipped
and weathered gates
something forgotten was
in the air.

Along the path I see
little bits of broken glass
still shining
but in the ground
I touch some little bells
hanging of an olive tree
but where are their sound?
I guess things just aren't the same
on Broken Memory Lane

Two little white clay birds
that used to be blue
mold in the now
dried up fountain
I stop in a grassy clearing to
admire the view
but all the trees are gone from the mountain
As I walk a little hoo-la-hoop
starts rolling towards me
but where are all it's colors?
I guess things really have changed
down Broken Memory Lane

hope you liked it =)